In front there lay a city covered in a layer of rubble. People laid out on the ground and as the sun woke up they started to come to life.1 2 3 people stood up and started to wace up the ufer people scattered on the floor the night was rough for the people
Dystopian story
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3 responses to “Dystopian story”
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I’m very impressed to see you integrating some of the more advanced grammatical and figurative devices in your creative writing.
The choice of a fronted prepostion to begin your piece is a good one and immediately gives a sense of three dimensionality to the space. I also appreciate the personification of the sun.
Apart from the spelling accuracy challenges, this piece is also rather short for the time you had to write today. What prevented you from getting more done?
Mr Waugh
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Thang for the comment I’ll tack it in to considorashon
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Great!
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React!